Printed out about eight pages of new writing or rewriting and have been playing with them.
Tendencies I need to watch: making sure I'm not the only one who can see the cinematic quality of the scene as it passes (or, not getting so comfortable with the image in my mind that I forget everyone else can't see it); over explaining (not trusting the reader enough).
Yes, the fact that these are contradictory competing interests makes it much more difficult/subtle. Most writers I know struggle to varying degrees over this balance.
Thinking I need to augment just with a line or two the characters who die before the final showdown so they feel a bit more real, resonate.
The death count, btw, is up to twelve now.
